Friday, February 24, 2012

Show, Don't Tell.

It wasn't a very near win, at all. We were both seniors at the only high school in our small town. Jack Harrow was the popular one, the one that everybody wanted to know, while I was just 'that kid'. I guess I knew that I was going to lose from the beginning, but you can't blame me for trying, right? The elections began at the beginning of the school year, and Jack and I were the only applicants. Right away I began to advertise for myself around the school, but it was all in vain. Every time I put up a flyer, it dissapeared. Every time that I hung up a poster, it was vandalized. Every time that I tried to convince people to vote for me, I was ignored. I didn't understand at first, but then I found out that it had been Jack's doing all along. He and all his friends had ruined my efforts and somehow convinced everybody, even my friends, to vote for him. I had worked so hard and done so much to win that election, while he had done nothing. I should have won, he didn't deserve it.

4 comments:

  1. I like this one a lot. Jack's a Jack-ass :D

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  2. And the detail struck me. It's like... etched in mah brains :p

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  3. Well obviously Jack did something. He conveniently swiped posters from the wall. This makes me feel indignant, so I believe you accomplished your goal though you probably could have added a tad bit more detail, like how the narrator came to know that Jack was doing all this stuff.

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  4. I like how you lead the reader to feel sorry for the main character and create a want for him to win and not Jack. Next time try and add some more descriptive words, other than that great job :)

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